Ooh, pretty! Not only did you paint an image but it rhymes, too! How do you do that?

Wow... This is so good... You don't have to change anything... It's perfect... And about me getting so many reviews: I'm not a better writer than you. How could I be, English isn't even my native language! There are just some people out here who review everything that I write, whether it's good or not :) Don't worry about the quality of your poems!

"Now the sun,

And with it all becomes forgotten

Of her lovely, painting fingers." As you said, literally dripping with imagery-rather impressive I might add! Despite your personal notions on this piece, I find it extremely inspiring. I must, in addition, thank you for your kind reviews. Since writing 'October Ocean' a few years ago, my writing has certainly branched out very deeply into original pieces that I thoroughly enjoy and am proud to call my own. Practice truly does make perfect. I encourage you to read them if you have a chance. Once again, thank you-and congratulations on your own success.

I don't think you should berate yourself about this, it's a really creative piece of writing. You're right, it was very much descriptive and overflowing with imagery. :) Suggestions...? Well, I know this was probably supposed to be a mysterious poem...but I didn't really get who this woman in lavendar was. It was very nice how it all was surrounding her and everything, but I was kind of hoping for a bit of an explanation. :) She sounds lovely, whoever she may be...lol. Great poem. :)

-ali

such a simple idea, but you wrote so much about it! and so well! i really like your work, keep it up...

I really like this, the imagery is excelent, I got wrapped into it. I think its easier for me to write about emotion rather than sight, so I like the ones who can caputre a good visiable image... am I rambling? Anyway, I think you did a good job. Keep writing.

Great stuff MJ! I think this is great how it is, but it would be interesting to see what else you could do with it, *wink wink*. hehe. Thumbs!

Arrivederci!

-Tigra-

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er welll...not a big fan of rainbows its kinda uh...er uhhh different o.o sorry i shouldnt be reviewing this im not a big rainbow fan Oo i like the moon better

i really like this- i love the new ryhme scheme you have- it works wonderfully in the poem- and i really like the way you say "And everyone looks." after each set of 3 stanzas that ryhme- nice way to change the ryhmes- makes it flow smoothly i think- wonderful images i love it

love always

wicked good! imagery is unbelievably excellent, i like the idea of 'everyone looks' - i love moments like when rainbows appear, and everyone forgets what they're doing for a few seconds, just to look. I've wantedto write poetry about the small wonderful moments in life that happen a lot - like that amazing poem you did bout your brother - but i never get round to it...hmmm, feel inspired...*oh dear, poetry alert :P* but anyway, i'd never considered giving eveyday blessings an out of the ordinary and vision-like quality th way you have hre. i'd be interested to see the picture, but its hardly necessary - have had a brilliant picture painted for me in my head! good job! :D