nice ending, there's a bit of repition of phrases here, but it has a sort of rhythm to it that seems nice. All ur poems this long? Not that much emotion expressed as I think there should be...eh, dunno, mayhaps cus there's so many love poems in the world...not my fav subject also, but that's my problem, eh?

Though I don't approve of being negative, (I believe you aren't bitter and this was stress relief for you) angst talent like this should definitely be nourished! ^_^V

I really liked this, I felt the hurt and the anger which was very cutting. Great work, omedetou!

hey, cool down... :) anyway, very well-written... i liked it