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| Lin Winter 2003-08-09 ch 1,  | abuseVery, very deep. |
| BrittneyAnna 2003-03-10 ch 1, | abuseI have tears welling up in my eyes that was so sad and kinda dark if you think about it. It was Awesome. |
| Chavi West-Wind 2002-12-02 ch 1, | abuseawesome...so sad...it was very dark, very sad, and quite deep. i cried...they were so cruel! i especially loved the last part... "...I died with pride removing its revolting self from my punctured heart." i'm glad u didn't make it so the person slit their wrists...that's kinda getting old, and this was much more dramatic. i loved it, a bit gruesome, but still awesome. the only grammer mistake i saw was where u said at the end "i can, unfortunately say..." that first comma after "can" shouldn't be there. but that's all i saw! great job.... |
| Phoenix Poet 2002-08-21 ch 1, anon. | abuseThat was one of your better poems. Interesting. way of expressing your feelings. |
| Tione 2002-06-05 ch 1, | abuseThis is very good! Awesome! Very deep and heavy. I have a poem called 'Pride'. This is a little bit of it. Hide The big jungle animal The ruthless cannibal And so on. It's posted in my collection, No Stars Out Tonight Keep up the good work! ~Jesus Freak |
| Aidlyn 2002-05-19 ch 1, | abuseWow, this is really good. You made me cry here, and I feel the same way sometimes, just because people make fun of me and other people like me. But, back to the writing. Superbly written and I hope to see more like this! |
| MoshiMoshiQueen 2002-05-13 ch 1, | abuse*crys* very deep! They were so cruel! people never relize that their words hurts others! I am glad you liked my poem, and I hope that you would never kill you self! You are a great writer and a great person! Never give up hope! And if you ever think about killing yourself remember I am always here to talk to! Life is something you can never get back and you should never regret life. Something I have learned that so many people kill them selves every day because what people say and I will always try my very best to make every one relize that you they have something to live for! Very well written! Keep writing! And always keep you head up no matter what happens! |
| No longer using this accoun... 2002-05-11 ch 1, | abuseHeavy and very good in my option. I can't see any spelling or grammer mistakes in the writing. The writing itself is good and to the point. Be intereting to see what else you come out with. Keep on writing. Grim Writter |