wow i like that too its really deep. you are an awesome writer!!

my eyes watered towards the end. I'm really glad I read that

sweet sadness. The purpetual juvenile's dream. Die and others will follow. it is beautiful.
I really felt the last half was much better than the first. I like the twist to the ocean waters.
Better suicide poem than I have ever wrote.

Wow, what a deep poem. My favorite line was "But a thorn is still a thorn, even if you have a rose attached."
Brilliance.

This is really good! Very powerful and moving! I must also beg your permission to use your quote "But a thorn is still a thorn, even if you have a rose attached." (I'm sure you're bored by that question ^~)
I hope your personal experience wasn't as painful...
~*Lyra*~

wow...this is really powerful. It isn't broken up at all, and that detracts a little from the poem, but it works without it. It makes you think a lot...I feel a little like this sometimes...But, wow, this is powerful.

Very, very deep... I hope you keep writing because this is the first thing of your I have read and it's one of the best things I've read on the site so far. Very nice.

wow another great poem, you are very talented, : )

this is awesome! i especially like the line a thorn is still a thorn even if it has a rose attached- :)- i used it when my friends were fighting yesterday, unpoetic ones, and it moved them. (and that was one line :P)

TO

Did a friend of yours really do that to you, read your writing and then insult it like that? I can tell you, that just from reading a little bit of your work, you have talent and anyone who denies that is either jealous, or the most blind and ignorant person in the entire universe.
The line:
But a thorn is still a thorn, even if you have a rose attached.
is my favorite line in a long time. I am going to put it on my Bio. I am putting this on my favorite stories list too. I like that it didn't rhyme, it was so real that I could picture the spirit standing there watching the only one who had understood her saying those things.
In the end of it, you said he was going to the ocean waves. Did you mean that he was going there in a sort of remembrance of her, or to kill himself also. Hopefully, just out of respect for the dead, two suicides would be very sad. God, I loved this.

I don't know how you can imagine your own funeral. It's incredibly depressing. You've arranged it in a more offbeat poetic style, making if feel more real and less "sing song," but there's still a good feeling of ryhthmn and flows well.
I love the line: "But a thorn is still a thorn, even if you have a rose attached," most. Is is alright if I quote it sometime. I love the imagery that comes with it.
Almost heart-wrenching to read it. The title takes on new meaning the more I think about it... the dead feel pain, but shed no tears.
It grieves me to think this is based on personal experiences. No one should have to go though something that turmoilous.
~Jetso

This is really, really good. You ought to show it to you-know-who! Follow your own advice, girl! :)

Love, me.