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Amaryllis Faye 2008-08-12 ch 17,	abusei'm really disappointed with the ending - you built this story up so well,,and then the ending just crashed and burned like this,.,it did not do justice to either the summary or the entire plot you had going. and the epilogue was so out of character - epilogues aren't meant to show the past, its used to let the reader know what goes on in the future, as a closure to the story. so that tidbit about their past conversation was not only weird but out of place. you should consider changing it if you ever think about revising this story.
SoulSam 2008-02-07 ch 18,	abuseok at first, but the ending? the last couple of chapters were kinda all over the place, and nothing was properly resolved. also, how could adriana just forgive him so easily, she shouldn't be such a pushover, she seems quite the doormat. were you trying to rush the story just to end it for the sake of ending it? i'm sorry, i don't ever really comment unless i have something nice to say, but this one kind of bothered me for some reason. i've read some of your other stuff, and they're definitely better.
love addict 2008-01-01 ch 18,	abuseI love love love this story, however i have some questions.. :)) Haha. anyways, i love this one :)) Godspeed dear :))
AJS 2007-12-09 ch 18,	abuseI don't get it at all. I think your story was okay... but I feel like nothing was developed enough. Like to start with, where did Adriana suddenly get that courage to confess to Braiden on Christmas Eve? She's loved him for so long, so why the sudden change now? Also the end. It doesn't make any sense at all. Is Braiden the father or not? Was Amber really lying? Even the whole Ryan situation wasn't really explained. I think it's fine that Braiden & Adriana got back together in the end, cuz hell, I love a happy ending, but I feel like she shouldn't have just taken him back so easily like that. You summarized everything up, making it just seem so insignificant, when I really think that it should have just been explained. Like were there tears in Adriana's eyes when she heard about what happened with Amber? How relieved did Braiden feel when she said that she would try to understand? What was going through Braiden's mind when he got endlessly drunk all those nights after he left her? You have a lot to explain, a lot of gaps, and a very confusing ending that doesn't make much sense. I think it'd be okay, with your epilogue, if it had been a dream or something... I don't know. But it's just that there was no explanation at all. Your ending wasn't very complete. I think this could have been a good story - it has a lot of potential. But there's just very essential things that it's currently lacking... -- Alyssa
jjeennnn 2007-03-12 ch 18, anon.	abusei luv thsi story. it is freakin awwesome. one of my faves for no won. it can't compete w/ my ultimate fave addicted to you but it is definetley one of my top faves on fiction press. i recomend addicted to you and i kno lots of other great stories too but alot of them aren't finished.:( well u r an awesome writer kepp doing wat ur doing,:)
Something Unintentional 2007-01-14 ch 1,	abuseHey Kayli! Awesome story! You continue to wow me over with awesomeness! Queenie
JusticeWriter 2007-01-06 ch 18,	abuseAw. How absolutely adorable?!?!?!?!? I loved it. :)
xo-pauli-ox 2006-10-04 ch 18,	abusewow i love ur fic! its realli guud! cudnt stop reading.. i lyked how u ended it too =D
akaCHEEKS 2006-09-04 ch 18,	abuseok.. it was all perfect and good in the beginning.. i was loving it and everything.. then all of a sudden.. you do this.. i don't feel the closure.. i feel like it's going to continue.. what happened to Amber's pregnancy?? what about Adrianna's mother?? are they talking now?? what about Chryssy and Ryan and all that.. what will happen to Braiden and Adrianna's relationship?? where are all the answers!! it's like a cliffhanger.. you left us hanging...
in darkness we glow 2006-07-07 ch 18,	abuseii loved the storyy. rlly got to mee.. it was fkin goodd..!! buh ii thought it wass too short uu noe.. ii was expecting the epilogue to be the futur buh it was still a rlly cute storyy ! -x0x- buhbyee sweetiie
sassnsweet 2006-06-16 ch 18,	abusethat was a great book but it so sad the way it ended
EnChAnTeD-KoReAn 2006-05-27 ch 18,	abusei don't understand ur ending...is amber really pregnant? is braiden really the father? what happens to adriana, braiden cryssy and ryan? i don't understand this ending at all...it's weird...ugh...dammit!! (excuse my cursing)...well, it was a good story up till then though...
Tasha 2006-05-02 ch 18, anon.	abuseI loved the story, I really did, but I don't understand the ending...that and the fact that I don't like it. I do, but WHAT HAPPENED AFTER!?! I'm sorry, when I read stories they become real and I get really curious about the rest of their lives. I love your stories.
emerald 2005-11-30 ch 18, anon.	abusewait...that was an epilogue? i am really confused...what exactly did happen to there relationship after prom mess?:S
DayLightsDarkness 2005-08-30 ch 18,	abuseAww..this was a cute story and i had a lot of fun reading it but i have to say the ending wasn't really a ending but i liked it nevertheless. This has got to be one of the stories that have many twist and events; keeps you on the edge of your seat, ya'know?I would really really like a sequel for this amazing story!!:)Hopefully i'll see it sooner or later when and if you do decide to write it.Amazing and extraordinary story. Love!!:)

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