this is so cool! the last line is the best...morbid. the title is really neat.

I really like it although I can't entirely grasp the depth of what you're trying to say. "Tortured souls ghost by with screams." I like that line.

Holy FRICK!!!! THIS is FABULOUS, JD. Wow. wow wow.
i'm rambling on with wows. Great style, shakespearian at times. wow. you are a goddess.

p.s. you know my song wasn't about, school-danny, right? just clearing it up.

nice. its really interesting.

Whoa...that really was very cool. It's...gosh, you stole all of the words. Kind of avant-garde maybe? I picked this poem about because the title said Vanilla Sky. That's a movie, but I've never seen it. I know Paul McCartney wrote the title song and he played it in concert on May 15th here in Tampa, so that's my little digression.