Whoa! This poem totally caught me off guard. Write more like this. It made my heart quicken.

spiffy! angst is our friend. sadomasochism is fun. anyway, I'LL HAVE TO READ SOME OF YOUR OTHER STUFF! i'll find the time to someday...VAMPS RULE! *slices open her arm and devours the delicious blood* what?? anyway, i must be going. cool poem...VERY angsty. but hey, i like angst and pain and suffering. *^O^* ~HoST~ *^O^*

Really interesting. I see it through many perspectives. Reminds me of my somewhat disturbing I wrote. Great job.~CT

::Whistles:: Wow. I'm impressed. A beautiful poem with a wonderful pattern I gaven't seen before. It's short, but as someone once told me, brevity is the soul of wit. I like your descriptions too. Very nice. It's going on my fave list! Woo-hoo!
~Toireasa

I *still* get shivers when I reda this one.

Thanks, all. Giant-boy, she didn't die yet, but HE did. Eyes unseeing means she doesn't know what she's doing. Mage-girl, this is the worst, I thought. No? Then which is?
~Talia~

this was good writing
the ending was a lil cloudy
it sounds like she died
"eyes unseeing"
not as creepy as some i've read
but again
pretty good

Oooh, creepy - especially at the point where you animate the knife! Good twist, and shiver-y.

This is a cool poem... trust me, I've written worse. That's probably why their not on here! But it was really good in my opinion. Keep it up.

Dear, I don't believe I've seen this one, it was quite good, less disturbing then some of yours I think. But that's just my opinion.

~Dragon