AAHHmygod this was so awsome :D

AWESOME STORY;)

that story was adorable, i tell you.:))


i lavved it!!:))

its cute:)

keep up:)

funny... my name's rachel, too.

the story's going great. even though it was written in 2002, i hope you get this.

Really sweet story. I like all the characters. Jared turned out to be very sweet.

hiya

great story

Angel

hiya

another error :)

you called jared, Jake in this sentence

I waved a hand at her and headed back for the house. Jake was on the porch, talking on the phone. I’m not one to eavesdrop, but I was curious.

Hope this helps

Angel

hiya

great first chapter and second. I really like your style of writing.

I found a little error i think. In the last paragraph it says that kathy called Lindsay and Eric to dinner. Isn't Eric meant to be Jared?


Can't wait to read the rest.

Angel

The idea of the story was really good but you had a lot of grammar mistakes and the way you wrote it wasn't the best. It didn't really seem realistic either but besides that, it was pretty good. :)

Hailey seems like such an awesome person. There weren't many descriptions about the characters but I'm liking the rest of the story. Nice job :)

great story :) keep writing

oh!
i like it already
:)

i liked it!

I loved it!

awesome.