this story is good and i love where it can go please continue this

FINSH!

Okay, this seems like a good story. I hope you finish the other 2, though, b/c the wait is killin' me here!

Yet another story you are writing. I have that problem too, once I had 7 stories going on at once, it was retarded.

In this story it has a problem like your other one. Its in first person, yet your character shows barely any emotion! Use first person to your advantage describe emotions, settings, and stuff!

I like that this character are different than your others, she seems to be the party girl type, while your others seem to be introverted intellectuals. Hailey seems to be developed a little I have a sterotypical feeling of what her personality is like. u-u And what she would do in certain situations.

Not many errors just a few grammar stuff. But its bearable.

Good job I like the plotline so far. Continue writing this and maybe you'll take my critizm into consideration

I really like your new story! But I want you to finish your other two as well. Maybe you could take a look at my new story. I'm not sure whether I like it or not and I need some critique. Great job!

this story is awesome per usual. but don't keep me hangin on Changes...i still love that! keep em commin ;-)

As usual, this is great! I'm gonna be waiting for more. I like this better than changes... sorry, but I do! Keep it up! The girl sounds like me, but I don't get caught. The bathrooms/lockerrooms are never safe when I'm around!

awesome...keep going and I really would like to see more on this!