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| lisagal 2007-05-09 ch 14,  | abuseOHH wow wat a sad but truly lovely story and ending. |
| Strangely Natural 2006-11-01 ch 14, | abuseOh the unbearable cuteness! SO thrilled about the happy ending, this story was wonderful! |
| Alenor 2006-06-30 ch 14, | abuseheya, this was a brilliant fic ~ luv Alenor. |
| blossomed_angel 2006-01-02 ch 14, anon. | abuseThis story's brilliant. A little more descriptions at certain points would have made it even better, but i loved it.~blossomedangel |
| Riku E. Fallon 2005-08-28 ch 14, | abuseAw... very sweet. Cute read, good for late nights. Thanks, keep writing! |
| dOrKy-GuRl03 2005-06-23 ch 14, | abusehey girl...that was such a very good story to read...so loving it...nice job too...thumbs uP!... |
| becxfok01 2005-06-02 ch 14, | abuseI really should sleep. I just read three of your stories in a row! I really like them all. This one was more touching than the others. Both the characters fell in love with each other even when they were imperfect and scarred. Its such a sweet act. |
| Krista 2005-04-18 ch 7, anon. | abuseYou had a great plot going, it could have been an amazing story, but then you screwed it up with the car accident. A good story doesn't need life changing drama every 5 seconds. You had your conflict starting with Matt's blindness and cripledness, then you overpowered it with the car accident. She could have been to scared to trust her feelings that are that strong on her first serious guy. But then she could have been drawn back. What your trying to do is have the perfect guy sweep the perfect innocent girl off her feet, but we've already heard that story and thats not where you plot is going. Who says that a blind guy or a criple won't sweep a girl off her feet. Who says the girl can't save the day and has to be helpless. What we really needed to see was how the girl helped rebuild the guy mentally and physically. Thats what sweeps the readers off they're feet. |
| Lily 2004-09-14 ch 14, anon. | abuseGood story |
| Midnight Demon 2004-06-01 ch 14, | abusegreat story love it |
| JT 2004-01-22 ch 14, anon. | abuseloved the story. it was very touching but also quite sad... *two thumbs up* |
| ley71305 2003-05-31 ch 13, | abuseThis was such a good story! Very sad at parts but great job! -Kelley |
| Gilly Bean2 2003-04-10 ch 1, | abuseYour stories are great. All the ones I've read...but...they end sort of abruptly. Sometimes, add an epilogue. Show what happens after the story. Give us a peek at what the characters do--show us with the family they've started...all the stories end with the two protagonists holding each other and knowing they'll be fine. Sometimes you need more than that. E-mail me if you want to talk. |
| Aimee 2003-03-11 ch 13, anon. | abuseAww, this story is soo sweet! I really enjoy your stories! |
| Sherbaby 2003-01-29 ch 14, | abuseThat was such a great story. All the right things to make it interesting and compelling. The only sugestion I have is for you to work on describing some scenes and things that happend. Some of them left me looking for a little more like what happens to Blue when she's getting surgery for her face, the pain she's going through or just if she's getting frusterated at how long it's taking but something like that. Anyway very good story. ~Rachael~ |