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| Lucretia Mc Evil 2002-07-22 ch 3, anon. | abuseYou've read way too much Anne McCaffery. This is just as hard to follow and drab as one of her novels, not to mention the fact that you haven't bothered to even create your own universe. You've used hers and just changed the names of everything. If you're absolutely sure you have to rip off an author, the least you could do is pick a good one. |
| CRM114 2002-07-18 ch 1, anon. | abuseHmmmm. I like the psychic idea, only because I find the idea of pre-cognitive human beings to be of great interest, not only for myself, but for the human race as a whole. Unfortunately for you, your story is mediocre, poorly written, undiscriptive, and (well) really drab and boring. Thanks for inviting me to Review. Cheers folks. |
| starsknight 2002-07-18 ch 1, | abuseInteresting concept and beginning. I'd like to see where this goes. I also have a couple of suggestions that might make the passage flow smoother; if you are interested, e-mail me. |