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| YoungInside 2008-08-21 ch 15,  | abuseYou have a gift. :) You managed to evoke fear merely through words. I fear for your characters which begin to sound real after a while. Although in a dream world, you write as though they exist. A very good job. Im actually terrified. |
| sketchingaCYNiC 2008-08-20 ch 19, | abuseyou, my dear, are quite amazing. i'm pretty sure i read the un-revised version of this tale a while ago, because i remember the parts where charlotte cut off her foot, but.. well, i don't remember it being quite this morbid and violent. anyway, i just wanted to drop a few lines. first -- i've read window panes of sugar, jack and jill, dark depths, roses and black glass, and have started on the nutcracker bleeds. you're. amazing. my goodness. i usually have a problem reading so many stories by the same author, but damn! your stories draw me in from the summary to the first chapter. i absolutely have to finish reading once i start. it's so addicting! second -- dark depths is so good. i'm sad it's not completed (is it on hiatus?). ah, the plot was only just beginning to unfold. so sad. i do hope you finish writing it sometime in the future, though. third -- THIS STORY WAS SO GOOD. OH MY GOODNESS. i thought chapter 17 (before the epilogue) was the last chapter because i was retarded and i was just utterly confused. i was like, holy-- what?! what just happened? did cindy and christian die?! DANG IT THAT SUCKS AW MAN BUT I GUESS I KIND OF EXPECTED THAT sigh -- and then "WAIT THIS ISN'T THE EPILOGUE! YAY!!" haha yeah. okay. that was pretty dumb. mm. but i am happy in how everything turned out... it was so good! such a page turner/scrollbar presser? haha i dont know. i just kept reading. ah, you're amazing. are you on my favorite authors list? you should be. goodness. |
| amore829 2008-08-12 ch 19, | abuseEKK! my friend told me about this amazing author (you) and i was like okay you write amazingly! i just finished this one in a few hous IT WAS AMAZING! i love your twists! i must read everything you've written. it is so good. |
| indiebot 2008-08-12 ch 19, | abusethe things i would do to write like you. the story was great, interesting, and well thought out. |
| anybody 2008-07-26 ch 19, | abuselove it!! |
| Invisible Pink Paradoxes 2008-07-25 ch 19, | abuseI made this account solely so I could confess my undying love for your writing. I was reading around midnight when I decided I should go to bed, and then I finished the story at about 2:30am. So much for that idea. I've already voted for this in that Most Memorable award thing as well. I LOVE how twisted this is from the source material. The scene with Charlotte and the shoe especially. I'm not even sure if that shoe's magic or if she just went off the deep end, no doubt a little of both. |
| McShortShort 2008-07-24 ch 19, | abuseanother great story |
| My Silence 2008-07-17 ch 19, | abuseI absolutely loved this! The characters and the dark undertones of the story completely sucked me in. You seem to have taken great care planning this story; I actually thought Cindy and Christian were going to die! I'm definitely adding this to my favorites list. |
| Jeweline 2008-06-16 ch 1, | abuseWow, very interesting, reading on! |
| ZeeElle 2008-06-05 ch 2, | abuse“But he hadn’t been fortunate enough to have anyone so close to him die.” That was the line that sold this entire chapter for me. For some strange reason, I found that line to be one of my favorites, mostly because it so bluntly stated the mindset of the character. It made wonder what kind of person would consider themselves ‘fortunate’ to have a death in the family, just because they wanted to get a peek inside the local mortuary. Clearly a guy much less invested in sentiment than the original fairy tale would like us to believe. You established your first major artistic difference here, and it was so convincingly done. From the way you described Christian’s feelings toward his father, and the amusing, almost sadistic way he handled the Von Croy sisters, I already found myself loving it! Christian’s chance introduction to the lovely Cindy was also a surprise, mostly because I wasn’t expecting it so soon. But again it established some great drama and foreshadowing for later. Christian, with his deliberately annoying curiosity, meshed so well with Cindy’s reserved demeanor, but internally we knew that she was just as mutually interested. She’s also hesitant, a little defensive, and very real. I could relate to that. I think I mentioned before how much I adore this reincarnation of a beloved character, and if I remember correctly, Cindy only gets better from here. I can’t wait to re-review the chapters when the supernatural aspect shows up, but I’ll get there…eventually. Another thing that I have to point out is the way you work with the dialect. It’s obvious that the story isn’t intended to have a modern day setting, but you still have a really good mastery of mixing a bit of the old speak with the new, which makes your style so much easier to read than others’. And the dialogue never fails to deliver, which is also a testament to your wonderful skills as an author. |
| ZeeElle 2008-05-26 ch 19, | abuseIt was a complete accident that I stumbled upon this story, in fact, it was really random browsing that found it for me, but I’ve never been so pleasantly surprised. I consider myself a highly critical reader, and between dialogue and plot, I usually hold the two to the highest standards. The fact that I thought about this story for days after I had finished it told me that even though I appreciate the mechanics, I absolutely fell in love with the heart of your story more. Cinderella is my favorite classic fairytale, hands down, and to read the story from an intensely different (and new) perspective was especially fun. I know that you warned the readers about the darker setting and tone of the story, but the mortuary as a new set, the sinister family as worthy adversaries, and the dark magic weaved in was exciting and at times fascinating to read about. I also loved that even though you were viewing the story from a different angle, you never sacrificed the elements that made the classic great. Such examples would include the underlying class struggle between the royal court and the peasant girl, the scheming step family attempt to sabotage our heroine, and her struggle to find her happiness with her prince charming. The one difference being that your characters showed a more serious and tangible struggle with finding their happiness, and I think that was well reflected in your plot. And finally, the most integral and enjoyable part for me, your characters. Each and every character that you wrote had an identity that was exclusive to them, and was never replicated in another mentioned. I loved how you made them react so realistically to the situations they were in, and even justified your ‘villians’ in their actions as well. I could feel the emotions and the battles of your characters just by reading their thoughts. Cindy was a refreshing change to our stereotypical wounded Cinderella. The girl was sharp, talented, and could stand her own in a conversation with the arrogant royal she met early on. Later, she became tougher and much more self sufficient, while never forgetting where she was emotionally invested. Her interactions with her family were interesting to say the least, and her scenes with Christian were always exciting to read about. I think you did her justice. And of course, our prince charming, Christian. I was quite impressed on your take with the classical good guy, as you showed a different sort of progression in him. You showed us that he was once an uncommitted playboy who entertained himself with female company, and then immediately turned and showed that a few years had turned him into a cynical and hard-edged man who no longer found pleasure in his pastimes. It was that maturity about the character that made his relationship with Cindy even more precious, and I loved that you were the first author who ever had that take on the character. I just realized that it’s been a while since you concluded this story, but I always love leaving my thoughts for any author, just to let them know that their hard work is still being discovered! This story is definitely one that I’ll remember for a while to come, and thank you for a new side of it! Hopefully, I’ll have time to critique my favorite chapters soon, but between finals, projects, and work…I need a longer day! |
| Katie 2008-03-14 ch 19, anon. | abuseWow.. that was totally intriguing! my eyes were glued to the computer... The last chapter kind of lost me but it was still magnificent after I figured it out.. You are a grand author that will surely go somewhere in life with your beautiful talent. |
| ReverberatexComplicate 2008-02-27 ch 19, | abusewow, i can't even think of what to say. this was beautiful. i absolutely adored reading this! and i honestly cant say that for many things. you've got a great talent with writing, despite a few spelling errors and mis-used words (very few, and very common) truly amazing work :D |
| Story Critic 2008-02-07 ch 19, | abuseWow that is awesome |
| - mitsukii - 2008-01-24 ch 19, | abuseoh my i LOVE your stories =] the first story i read on fictionpress is ur stories ive read nearly every story u have buh it was on my frends account =[ and now i have my own account :D |