Very intense!

Whoa. Yeah, that was incredibly blunt. I agree with the other reviewers- it's a good warning.

Wow. Really, really well done.

Crude and blunt, yes, but I could see how it could be meant as something far more. Personally, I don't know if I have ever seen pure horror summed up so completely in seventeen syllables. :)

Oh, wow...that was incredibly cool. Very very very poignantly done. :)

Talk about emotions. WOW!

It wasn't crude or blunt-I thought it was fairly delicate. You really captured the fear (and relief).

Whoever you are, you are a spectacular poet. To be able to write but a few sentences and strike the reader wtih emotion is indeed a gift you posess.

Blunt, but not overly overt. Intense and yet humbling in its reality. A fantasiticly realistic piece that envelops the reader with the poets expression.

I was absolutely gripped by it, personally. The contrasting imagery really contributed to the overall atmosphere of tension and panic that a poor person in this situation would feel. I think that this Haiku should be distributed with contraception to warn people of the dangers of unprotected intimacy. I can sympathise with the utter devastation felt by the narrator and his partner in this poem, because the sheer depth of feeling behind the words really reached out and touched my heart and soul. It shall remain with me for the rest of my life and beyond. Dear author, I salute you. Seriously.

Wow...hehe I agree, it's blunt and all that, but it's pretty good. Makes ya think. Sayonara!

! (for lack of a better thing to say...let me gather my thoughts) ! Yes, that was crude. Yes, that was blunt. But in its own strange way, it is art, it's definitely not a feel-good story, but ... I guess it had to be said, and it painted a tense, nervewracking picture.