oh wow... predictable it was certainly not

nice!
xx

Ohh...I like it a lot. It was a good story. Too bad it's over. :( Oh well, it was really good. I'm glad I read it. :) At least it was a good ending. It was really great; I loved it.

Sincerely, H.P. Farmer

foreshadowing...so far...i'm liking it.

I like this story so far. It reminds me of Amelia Atwaiter-Rhodes, I'm sure that is the name, book Demon in My View. It is almost exactly like it but different characters and a few changes. It's really good though. If you can send me the full story to my e-mail I want to print it out. Keep up the good work, no scratch that, great work.

I fear you'll be seeing a lot of me...'Defeated, the young senior turned in the opposite direction to meet a horrifying fate that would strike terror into the hearts of even the bravest: calculus.'Try phrasing the last part differently.'To meet a horrifying fate that would strike fear into even the bravest of hearts.'it fits better.This is reminding me of 'Demon In My View' by Amelia Atwater Rhodes. Any fact there?-ta

In the beginning of the chapter, you linger far too long on the fact that whomever is watching Meredith is staying there. It becomes repetitive and dull, although the way you say it is beautiful.'he watched her when she turned off the light...'Try changing when to as.'it was so easily-too easy-and tempting...'easily? otherwise, this is turning out to be very interesting. It may actually be one of the few I finish reading.-ta

hey cat, this is truly a great story! it reminds me of that story about that witch hunter who fell in love with a vampire...and then she was turned by him and shunned by everyone she knew. very similar...an inspiration maybe?

Okay. Just venturing a comment but this sounds alot like a book A. Atwater-Rhodes wrote. Dont know if you've heard of her but it is VERY similar.

Incredible! Your style of writing is absolutely amazing, and your plot was too. I especially loved the quote at the end of chapter four. Your characters and their actions and reactions were very real. We definently do need to talk sometime.

Interesting so far, love the detail esp the descriptions of the ppl

some of the (lack of) formatting in the later chapters makes it difficult to read, but all in all this is quite an excellent story - intense, provocative, intriguing.

I thought your story was awesome! I'm so happy that they ended up together!! : ) R u going to do a sequel? B/c i think u kind of left it hanging about Velika and Meredith's real mom...Great story! : )

Love the characters.

Interesting story...I'll be sure to read more of your works in the future.