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| I Murder on Impulse 2008-05-29 ch 27,  | abusenice! xx |
| HungarianPotatoFarmer 2006-07-30 ch 27, | abuseOhh...I like it a lot. It was a good story. Too bad it's over. :( Oh well, it was really good. I'm glad I read it. :) At least it was a good ending. It was really great; I loved it. Sincerely, H.P. Farmer |
| faerie princess00 2006-05-19 ch 1, | abuseforeshadowing...so far...i'm liking it. |
| Shadow of the Black Wolf 2005-08-16 ch 1, | abuseI like this story so far. It reminds me of Amelia Atwaiter-Rhodes, I'm sure that is the name, book Demon in My View. It is almost exactly like it but different characters and a few changes. It's really good though. If you can send me the full story to my e-mail I want to print it out. Keep up the good work, no scratch that, great work. |
| Lykaios 2005-04-16 ch 3, | abuseI fear you'll be seeing a lot of me...'Defeated, the young senior turned in the opposite direction to meet a horrifying fate that would strike terror into the hearts of even the bravest: calculus.'Try phrasing the last part differently.'To meet a horrifying fate that would strike fear into even the bravest of hearts.'it fits better.This is reminding me of 'Demon In My View' by Amelia Atwater Rhodes. Any fact there?-ta |
| Lykaios 2005-04-16 ch 2, | abuseIn the beginning of the chapter, you linger far too long on the fact that whomever is watching Meredith is staying there. It becomes repetitive and dull, although the way you say it is beautiful.'he watched her when she turned off the light...'Try changing when to as.'it was so easily-too easy-and tempting...'easily? otherwise, this is turning out to be very interesting. It may actually be one of the few I finish reading.-ta |
| Beloved Beatrice 2004-12-21 ch 27, | abusehey cat, this is truly a great story! it reminds me of that story about that witch hunter who fell in love with a vampire...and then she was turned by him and shunned by everyone she knew. very similar...an inspiration maybe? |
| Nessa 2004-12-04 ch 4, anon. | abuseOkay. Just venturing a comment but this sounds alot like a book A. Atwater-Rhodes wrote. Dont know if you've heard of her but it is VERY similar. |
| Petronia H 2004-08-07 ch 27, | abuseIncredible! Your style of writing is absolutely amazing, and your plot was too. I especially loved the quote at the end of chapter four. Your characters and their actions and reactions were very real. We definently do need to talk sometime. |
| HannahMarie*Willow 2004-07-30 ch 2, | abuseInteresting so far, love the detail esp the descriptions of the ppl |
| lin 2003-12-25 ch 1, anon. | abusesome of the (lack of) formatting in the later chapters makes it difficult to read, but all in all this is quite an excellent story - intense, provocative, intriguing. |
| ItalianQT 2003-11-26 ch 27, | abuseI thought your story was awesome! I'm so happy that they ended up together!! : ) R u going to do a sequel? B/c i think u kind of left it hanging about Velika and Meredith's real mom...Great story! : ) |
| Zabella 2003-08-15 ch 4, | abuseLove the characters. |
| sapphire-chocobo 2003-08-13 ch 1, | abuseInteresting story...I'll be sure to read more of your works in the future. |
| Hecate 2003-05-23 ch 27, | abuseWell, I must say you have definently offered a tasty little morsel of fiction to us hungry readers! (And for me, the jealous writers!) I love the idea of a half-angel, half-vampire. In my story, I have the product of an angel and a fallen angel. Should be interresting on how she turns out. Man, you left such an awesome review on my story, I feel like whatever I write will be just petty little words. But you are most certainly the best vampire fiction writer on the web! If you ever wanna co-author a fic, shout at me at vleighh@aol.com. toodles! lots of love from the underworld, ~Hecate~ |