And you say you don't think you'll end up as a professional writer!

Sweet! You have such talent... your poems flow so effortlessly (or at least that is how they read!). The lines:

Architecture that is evidence

Of previous escape

And there is a heaviness here that even

The statues bend beneath.

were my favorite! )

I write on napkins a lot as well. Doesn't turn out quite this long though- I run out of napkin. I applaud your apparently small handwriting or well managed use of napkin space.

I can see this in my mind's eye like I was there. You can hear it, taste it, see it and smell it. I can almost touch it, it's that tangible.

Loved: "And there is a heaviness here that even/The statues bend beneath."

Oh this created such a beautiful picture in my mind! It is such a lovely poem.

rather intresting

i got lost at the very end

it was really good!

*lost soul