Again, I love the suspense. This story is so mysterious all the way to the end and I love it. What was that thing supposed to be? The ending was so cool and I thought it was really sad when she saw both her best friends dead. Anyway, this is awesome!

-Pikurusu

great story. like all of urs. lol. anyway- yeah great.

Very excellent descritption. Your way of writing is very good.

This was really great to read, you're very good at including detailed description in your stories.

It's way too fast and doesen't follow a timeline either, making it quite confusive. I've noticed the same problem in your other stories. No plot, no characters, nothing is defined. Reading your stories is like opening a page in a book and reading a scene. There are merely sketches of what a real fanfic could be like.

Please, do not take this the wrong way, I still think you have a nice and simple writing style. I'm just giving you a few pointers since you asked me to check out your stories.