cute story :)

That was a really cute story! I really enjoyed it! Thanks!

Great story, keep up the good work.

Hey,
I really liked your story. I especially like Darien - not as a boyfriend for Olivia, but just as a character. And this is kind of random, but since you changed Olivia's last name to Walker, when you put it with Dallas (the city in Texas), it reminds me of Walker, Texas Ranger.
Sorry about that. Sometimes I ramble.
Anyway, I thought this had an interesting plot. I liked the idea of Cali not being a total jerk/airhead, but sometimes she seemed that way to me (like the going shopping thing). And Dallas kind of seemed like a girl occasionally - especially in the last few chapters where he sees Olivia with Darien and starts crying. But hey, this is perfectly understandable. It is hard to write from a guy's perspective if you are a girl (which I'm assuming you are, if you aren't than this would be rather embarrassing.)
Also, sometimes the plot seemed a little shallow - like you could have expanded upon things better. The dance, for instance, was barely described at all, except for the brief scene with Dallas and Olivia.
Also, I think you could have done without the epilogue. You could maybe making the whole college/proposal thing into a sequel, but it doesn't really fit here. It kind of makes the story seem cheesier than it is.
Overall, I thought this was a great story. You have some great ideas and you also use pretty good grammar (which may not seem like a huge thing, but is actually rather rare around this site).
Good luck in your future writing endeavors!
Signed,
WithoutException

Cute story. I like how you didn't completely make Calida out to be a total **, but even then Dallas wasn't really satisfied with her, just because she wasn't Olivia. I wonder how Darrien was feeling. He probably didn't come visit to expect that the girl would be in love with her best friend. But I'm glad that things ended up this way because really, the story was for Olivia & Dallas, not Olivia & anyone else :)

-- Alyssa

what a horrible last name for olivia! wanton does mean sexually immodest if you didn't know! poor girl..she would probably be called a ** all her life

Adorable story.

AW i lovee thesee happy endings ! They always ALWAYS should end up together and marry each other.. i recommend you read the story snapple coffee.. ii mean you story reminded me of it.. like not that you did plagea or something no.. just that god... you should just read it =)

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keysha.

this felt a little rushed, but overall it was great!

aw that is so great. i love this story, cya later ~ luv Alenor.

yeah. already reviewed, but in order to trick the fp database into letting me have more stories on my favs list, I have to review and add this to my favs that way, not from the lil review box in the corner. Does that make any sense? Probably not. Oh well. Oh, and how do you pronounce Olivia's friend's name? The one that starts with an A. Maybe include that in an author note somewhere, or not. Whatev.

AW! *girly squeal-sigh* That was SO CUTE!! I TOTALLY love this story. You did a nice job of taking the typical "falling for the best friend" line and making it your own. Also, I do wish to commend you on how well you did the dance chapters. Same day, same scene, different people, VERY LITTLE overlap. Well done! *squeal* Also, nice job writing in both POVs at once, as well as keeping the story going - having it last a few months without going into boring detail we don't care about, its only purpose being to drag the story out. Anyways, keep writing! (*runs off to read other stories*) Later! ;-D

well, now i've read most of your storys...and my verdict?...THEY ROCK! well, that off mi chest...lol. sorri i haven't reviewed all your chapters and every story...sumtym this half yr i'll go back and review every chapter of every story..kay? i read ur profile thingy...and to let u noe, ur not the onli one, i cry at the slightest thing...i think last time was wen mi frinds were trying to get me to apoligise to this english teacher for 'disrupting his class by not doing homework' i started crying too...lol, im not ashamed of it...cause i can't help it...are you? lol, anyway...i really, genuinly think ur stories rock...so, keep up the good work! ^-^ hm, i have a weird ugre to tell every person i review that if they check mi profile thingy and c that i haven't posted stories up, and that i just read and don't write...it's because im scared i'll get nil reviews, or flames...lolluvDee

aahh..its over...! but im happy dat their gona live together...yay! wel...keep writing other stories!
-hurricane

hey I love this story! i've read it like 3 or 4 times! i was thinking and you could do a story about them geting married and stuffy like that!