fantastic story.

This was a very cute story. As you said, it would most definitely benifit from being rewritten. Some of the grammer could use looked at. But I liked it.

Cute =D

This chapter could stand a little rewriting, but it's still a nice moment between her and her dad.

Maranwe Telrunya

It is pretty interesting, and very well done- I've seen stories written by people in their twenties that could learn from this. It does have some errors, but it's not bad.

=D Maranwe Telrunya

It's good! I hope you keep writing!

oh No!

I think you should take out the part about Garth Brooks... just a suggestion though.

aw! yay yay yay for Gareth!

Ahh! Sweet guy!

ahh! no!

I mean good story but ahh no!

vondubar! i can't spell german words... oh well, if its all the smae to you, "wonderful!"

DUDE!

nooo....he died. rodeos are so dangerous. ok, i won't lie...i did find the chapter a tad bit unrealistic but i did not find it stupid. the lasso part was unrealistic so i think you should focus on changing that part. maybe he distracts the bull, or something like that. the rest of the chapter was written wonderfully, and it is a very important chapter by the looks of it because Matt died. Update soon!

You can't stop there! I need to read more!

this looks like the start to an interesting story. calley's dad seems like a great father, it's nice to see a change from drunk fathers who beat their children up...too bad he's going to die*sniff* so gareth is interested in calley...i like when stories keep me hooked by the first two chapters. update soon!