"Don't gather words you took". The person obviously took the words if he/she gathered them. "And to name birds on the wing". I'm not sure what you mean. Hm.. (wonders if what I said rhymed...) heh.. "which is all I ask" better if it is "is all I ask" ?

Hey girl, been a long time since I last talked to you. I like the poem. I miss ya.

Awesome! Girl, you have some insights into the world and the way it should be. I suppose that 's the only difference between your cynical and your hopeful poems and stories.