Your first and i can't wait to find out the rest of this story Great Job man!

Hey this is really good. I like the whole midevel feel to it. Are you sure you're only 14? You write like a seasonal professional. I'm impressed. Normally I don't read the original fiction that's posted, but I try to read the poems/stories that was written by those who reviewed my poems.(Thanks for reading and reviewing my poem.) Now I can honestly say that I have a real good reason to check out some Original fics. I think you've got this one in the bag, and it's perfect as is. Now I'm looking forward to chapter 2, although it's been a while since you've updated. You really should finish this. It's really good, and VERY ORIGINAL. So get back to writing. TTFN.

this story is really well-written and it's really interesting. Me hopes that you continue to write more _

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Cool story!