as an exercise this is well written. as the beginning of a story, its interesting. if you ever did decide to go further with this, im sure there will be reviewers out there to cheer you on :)

You know, you should really add more to this one. I can't help but feel that it's not really finished at all, you know?

You
are
god.
*bows down at your feet, all hailing and ever mindful of your shoelaces*
SIMPLY FANTASTIC. I love this. Your details are INSANE. Insane. Really good words. "Visage" and "monochrome" and a billion others, and I would make this review longer, but unfortunately, I must be leaving, like, yesterday. Fantastic stuff, nothing negative to say AT ALL.
All the Best,
Heavily

It's so sweet and funny, I like it a lot.

^o^ Much fun, much fun, even if I see no slash implications. This kind of character-crossover fic is always fun to write and even funner (word existence?) to read. :D Continue!