Sick, slick, stunning... The first two chapters are made even more disturbing by the tender age of the narrator, and I liked the jump into the future, to see how mother and daughter are faring as the girl grows up.

I really like it pretty much. So cute chapter! C;

U suck just giv up riting FOREVAR losar!!

Wow. Brilliant story. The tone and concept and everything are perfect. I don't even think I saw any grammatical mistakes o_O . It's worthy of publishing (not kidding)! But yeah, this is most definitely going on my faves and alert :3

Ah. Beautiful.. Very nicely done, really. Some typos here and there, but otherwise, this is perfect. I hope you get it published!

I hadn't realized that there would be another chapter. It's still good, but a bit unclear at the ending. Really creative, though.

This story is AMAZING. Either that, or I'm just demented. XD I really liked it. So sad, though. Sylvia is adorable, too. ^_^

wow.. that's sad. :( and VERY well written. there's a little typo tho.. two, even. might wanna make sure those don't show up when you're all out and publishing.. in Chapter 2: "vI wasn't sure what Mommy was going to do" and "v"Sylvia?"" *pats you on the head and gives you a cookie* well done! :)

I am in such awe of your writing. Bravo! I hope you get this published. I can't really think of any criticism, except that I noticed a few small typos that could be cleared up. Again, a great piece.

That's very nice. It's a bit...wow. It's an intresting take on the whole vampire story. I like it a lot. hope it gets published!! ^^

-Ano

Whoa...

Good story! I don't know why, but I have a strange liking of vampire fics.

wow, I'm glad the I don't help the needy..... that often

Hey, thanks for reviewing! I don't have spellcheck on my computer yet, but i'm working on it. I really like this story, it tells great detail, even from a child's point of view. One question though, how old is the kid? She seems pretty young because she still calls her mom "mommy". Keep going! Kick **!

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Yu lite velly good stoly. I like muchee. Some time I no can unnerstandee stolies but yure stoly velly clearl. Goodie Fit fol publishing, I'm surle.
If I am must to say sumting clitical I say could be longer, morle ending, but leally I also like as is.
Sincerlely,
Chinee Chan