Nice work. I liked the main character. It seems as if you might be planning to write a sequel. If you do, I'd love to read it. I was curious about the world and its culture. Maybe you could put some more about that into the next story, if there is one.

It's a great story! Needs a little work though. You might want to make a Prologue, to let the readers know more of about why Bran was on the hill, or where she was going. Other than that it sounds really interesting. I love stories with a heroine in it! Can't wait to read the next chapter!

what'dya know? more kickass stories. it's only what i expect from you. write on, k? :)