i think its cute. very good for a 4th grader! Don't quit!

I like the way it all comes together! good work!

That wasa NOT dorky, that was real good.
Major Props
May the force and Legolas be with u
Heehee

Hey, I like your poem! (Hehe)

It has a nice message, and it fits into its rhyme scheme and rythm nicely.

good job! nice poem...

you know you don't have to rhyme. It kinda makes the poem cheesy.

hey this is really good! You're rally good at this stuff! put up your other poem!!!

Nice poem. It's not dorky at all! In fact, I think most people (myself included) would wish for the same things this poem says you would...