gr8 poem! gr8 prose! u also did a gr8 job in adding atmosphere to ur poem. ur descriptions were kickass, especially the way u described suicide. they were really amazing. they even made cliches, like the sand sliping through fingers, feel renewed. sometimes they sort of obstructed ur point though. the only weak point was the argument u giv is sort of feeble and ambiguous. i mean, u can't stand it and wud commit suicide just b/c u dont... as a matter of fact i dont even understand wat u cant stand. i guess this was made intentionally vague, so that u cud focus on style, which u succeeded admirably on. *** out of ***. keep riting!

nice poem...very deep...btw you were grammatically incorrect - winds blows...

no suicide allowed. grrr...lol
very excellent poem...we need to get you out of the house and doing something, my dear...perhaps the movie tonight will help

Stacy, that was really well written, but I really wonder if it's written about yourself... so sad... I've felt that way before about school...

People cannot live with sorrow and hopelessness! May the obsolete person take courage to go on and take pride in the very reson he/she chooses to be obsolete:)