Rocky,
Now this is who you are, smart, poingnant, and talented in writing. No profanity, no hate, no anger.
Keep writing like this and many will notice.
Love always
Your sister Carrie

this is a beautiful story that really makes me appreciate life. there are only a few spelling errors- dieing should be dying and coffie should be coffee. just wanted to point that out! great short story. i loved it.

Maybe if I hadn't reviewed, I would not have found myself where I am now . . . :o)
Nice idea - however, it might be better if you elaborated a bit more.

So death is a release? That's what it sounds like to me. Anywho...true. People should stop to watch a sunset. They're pretty ^_^ I'm already missing my home in the middle of the woods. I'm stuck in a city where just breathing the air or drinking the water wants to make me gag *sticks out tongue* Good idea!

Savin

Very nice story but kind of sad. I like how you told the story without realy "telling" the story like how it happened.
That is a gift. Run with it!

I'd prefer to see it as Death teaching us about Life, but, not a bad story. You might want to go over the thing with a spell-checker; although the spelling mistakes almost seem to add to the atmosphere of the story. So, if you did it on purpose, leave it alone.

hehehehehe, I know what you mean. I love Starbucks and I know it stands for more than coffee!!! I really like this short piece. thanks for your review on 'Traveling the Sahara'. I'm working on the future chapters to make it have 'more depth' as you put it. It's getting a little better.........
Loco Bailando.

I don't really know what you meant by the last line: "Maybe, if I hadn't gone there, I wouldn't be free."

Other than that, I totally know what you mean about nature...I have family in southern Wisconsin and it is ab-so-lute-ly gorgeous up there. I live in Texas, and walking through grass barefoot is a luxury (darn fire ants!). Our society today is so busy and caught up in everything electronic and mechanized, we forget the beauty of nature...which has no ringtones, beeps, or fancy graphics.

If we could all teach ourselves to enjoy the strength and beauty of a great willow tree, swaying and lilting gracefully in the breeze--or ducks rising off a pond, silhouetted against the dying rays of an autumn sun...

Nice message. I think it was a little short, but it managed to convey your words of advice. I think you could have been a little more detailed in your description of thought. Not a bad job.