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| Punk'N'Rock Chick 2006-10-03 ch 1,  | abuseOh my god...these are hilarious. LMAO |
| traeumenHerz 2003-01-12 ch 3, | abuseI am inclined to believe that this is my favorite of these three poems. I NEVER would have thought of this! However, if you wouldn't mind, I would change things about a bit to make it a little easier to read and emphasize certain dramatic or funny points, as so: The second stanza's last two lines to 'Two "I"s, no, "E"s! But also a "D"!' And by the way, I love the two eyes bit. The third stanza's last line could be 'So I leave for Mr. Ket', because 'leave to' sounds very odd and means nothing because it's never used, but 'leave for' sounds like you're going to go get Mr. Ket. The fifth, although how you phrased it is very good, the last line could be changed to '"You WANT him to eat me?!"' Then the sixth end line, since the grammar there is also odd, 'Thinking of everyone but me.' And the seventh stanza kinda ruins the humor a little when it says 'feed it some paper', you might want to say, 'As I offer it paper,' And this is all really just nitpicking, so do what you want with it, even if it's to throw my advice into a furnace. |
| traeumenHerz 2003-01-12 ch 2, | abuse*smiles* The picture held me rapt until the end. But wouldn't it be funnier if he now looked almost like a misshapped ball of yarn? The inconsistant rhyming threw me off a little, though. And since I can't review your other poem again, I will tell you here that you can never be too surrealistic, but I liked it better with just tigers. And how did you find your homework? You never did say. |
| Wacky-Writer2 2002-12-28 ch 3, | abusefunny |
| Wacky-Writer2 2002-12-28 ch 2, | abuselol i love that thats my fav |
| Wacky-Writer2 2002-12-28 ch 1, | abuseHey wut's up? Good poem. By the way this is tootsierollpop99 form neopets :) |
| Jenqo 2002-10-22 ch 3, | abuseHmm, interesting. Sort of reminds me of Shel Silverstein, you may be on the same wavelength. Makes me wish I could write poetry. |
| Smiley- Bear 2002-08-17 ch 3, | abuseThat was soo cute hehehe. Write some more please! |
| Smiley- Bear 2002-08-17 ch 2, | abuseLol I can see this. You are very good write more! |
| Smiley- Bear 2002-08-17 ch 1, | abuseHehehe.. I too have came up with some lame excuses. This was good. Keep writing! |
| Catella Erato 2002-08-16 ch 1, | abuseMehehehehe! Amusing, very amusing! Nice Job with the words! |
| dog-boy 2002-08-15 ch 2, | abuse"A collection of FUNNY poems..." I think "A collection of really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, FUNNY poems..." would be better! |
| Tom Bombadil Groupie 2002-08-14 ch 2, | abuseSadly, I get this poem! LOL! You have cute lil poems! Why don't you read mine too? Mine are odd as well! |
| Tom Bombadil Groupie 2002-08-14 ch 1, | abuseHehe! This is kinda like that Dr. Seuss poem... I don't recall the title.... but good job! This is cute! |
| Whisper 2002-08-13 ch 1, anon. | abuseI'm a bit confused with this poem. Is the person mentally insane? Penguins and tigers? And is the person walking and seeing this an X5? |