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| nevareven 2007-05-18 ch 9, anon. | abuseI absolutely love this story. YOu have a real gift for fiction. I can't wait for updates from you. I also love Almost an Angel... I'll take updates on either but I would love to keep reading both. |
| XME-Witty 2006-07-27 ch 9,  | abuseThis is an interesting story, keep up the good work! You're right, it is a little bit dialogue-heavy, but not enough to take away from the story. Also, Aaron claimed to have no sexual attraction to Sai towards the beginning of the story, but then later he was surprised when Sai said so. Otherwise, it's very good. I like how their friendship seems to flow from friendship to romance over a long period of time. |
| Beky 2006-04-17 ch 3, anon. | abuseWoah...this is eerily similar to what happened between me and my best friend. Except we both decided it was just hormones and went on with our lives. -.-' |
| Ally-Kat722 2006-01-18 ch 9, | abuseHey! That's GREAT! I LOVE it! I've already read it twice, and I plan on reading it again sometime! It's really good, and I'd LOVE to read more! Keep it up!Good luck!Keep writing! |
| sinophile 2006-01-01 ch 9, | abuseHey... Wow. Haha, what can I say? It's a fantastic story. I'd read this a year ago or something but the end wasn't up yet. Anyway... I still don't have a very picture of what exactly they look like (the height for one thing.), and when you say Asian, that encompasses a few hundred features. Also, which one is dominant? Things like that... I dunno, just suggestions. I really, really, really, really, really like the story though. Really, really like it. |
| Jayn 2005-12-30 ch 9, | abuseAw! I want more! This is an adorable story. I love the characters! PLEASE UPdate soon! |
| AnonymousReader 2005-11-20 ch 1, anon. | abuseMe again. I commented on Almost an Angel. I read this piece second - like it already but it looks like it's just at the start. Guess I'll have to come back when you update. *hint hint* |
| ravenquill 2005-09-18 ch 9, | abusei think its good even if you did get a little off the description thing and into dialogue. and i do really enjoy tiffany and mike. XD |
| ravenquill 2005-09-18 ch 2, | abusethe descriptions in this chapter are really nice. good job. ^^ |
| elephant-chimes 2005-09-17 ch 9, | abuseI love those twins to death! *huggles twins* They seem like the perfect brother-sister duo, you know? Anyway, YAY for the smooching! And I know how you feel about "dialogue heavy" thing; I tend to do that myself. But it's still great, nonetheless. Keep it up! ~Heidi |
| Momochi Zabuza 2005-09-16 ch 9, | abuseI'm so happy you are giving us a heads up and that you will be updating! THANK YOU SO MUCH! Can't wait for more! |
| efp444 2005-09-16 ch 9, | abuseLoved it. Fantastic - please continue! |
| Ophikins 2005-09-14 ch 9, anon. | abuseWow. Really good story, I liked it a lot! You already have a pretty good handle on what you need to improve (detail, non-dialogue) so I shan't over-restate it. One thing I think you already know is that your dialogue is really well done and natural seeming, so don't cut down on that just to pump up the non-verbal stuff. Don't over-edit that part. Very very good, can't wait to read more! ~Ophikins |
| BlyssfulStorm 2005-08-06 ch 8, | abuseI really like this. It's so cute. I love how you didn't make this a cliche friends-fall-in-love story. It's so unique. |
| Momochi Zabuza 2005-07-25 ch 6, | abuseUpdate soon! |