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| The Black Rider 2003-03-29 ch 1,  | abuseYou even tell amazing stories through haikus. That really proves your talent. |
| Incrys 2003-03-25 ch 1, | abuseIt didn't quite register immediately, but after the second read-through it registered. I particularly liked the "darkness creeps" vs. "darkness flees" idea. The symbolism was also very well thought of. |
| Heart of the Sword (FPNET i... 2003-03-22 ch 1, anon. | abuseI've never heard it described in such a way before. ~Heart of the Sword |
| Della C 2003-03-08 ch 1, | abuseYou are making me Go crazy. Your concepts rock, But the syllables! TAG! you have been hit by a Haiku Review from Della C. FWITCHAAH! this is 3-5-3, which is close, but not CORRECT. Haiku are 5-7-5, and I am an evil little nitpicker to call you on it. However, you're managing to put real emotion into the haiku, something that I can't ever quite do. (because I rarely try) |
| Ayod Botla (too lazy to sig... 2002-10-02 ch 1, anon. | abuseHm. Short, yet extremely good. Ayod Botla |
| E. Gao 2002-09-02 ch 1, | abuseIsn't there another name for the 3-5-3 style? Hmm...have to go look it up now. But first: Even though you've titled this "lightning cowardice," which, in effect of the poem symbolizes something along the lines of "evil afraid of sudden flash of heroics" (sorry this is so incoherent; I'm in a hurry), I personally imagine it as a general goodness pervading the darkness, like a beam of sunlight or something. The lightning works, of course, but it seems too sudden. -_^ Just a bit of criticism. ~EG |
| Familiar Alien 2002-08-19 ch 1, | abuseI hope you life is alright, this is a nice Haiku. But you miss-speeled Cowardice. |
| Mr.X 2002-08-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseAt first I didn't care too too much for it.. but when I saw Piper Cub's view, it just changed drastically. Da da- da daaaaaaah! 2001 a space oddysey style! |
| Piper Cub 2002-08-18 ch 1, | abuseYep. It puts me in mind of a R. Strauss symphonic poem (hint, nudge, wink). daaaaa-- daaaaa-- daaaaa------------------------ DA DAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!! (pum pum pum pum pum pum pum pum pum pum) I LIKE IT! :D |