This is so great! I can understand exaclty how you feel under that willow. Beautiful feeling, isn't it? very liang quai!

I love this poem!! it's so good!

*hug* beautiful poem, dearie...hehe...where did dearie come from....*wanders off into insanity*

Please revise it. I think this could be an absolutely gorgeous piece if you smooth over the few sticky lines. Increase your vocabulary.. I use a dictionary to find appropriate synonyms when writing poetry. Play with the wording until every line fits the frame of the poem: a beautiful and poetic piece. Please please plase revise it, I'd hate for this beauty to not be perfected.