Good story. I like the way its written- very soft, seemingly nostalgic. The one thing that didn't quite fit was the steam leaving the bread with "a viper's hiss". Based on my experiences with baked bread, it just doesn't seem plausible. Other than that minute detail, excellent story. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Ahh! My heart was beating like crazy with foreboding at the end of the chapter. This was a great story, I love your style.

Very cool story, for lack of a better word to describe it. XD
It's very easy to picture... Lovely images.
It's very interesting, and captures the reader's attention even though normally, it's like: bakery - who cares? :-P Well, I especially liked how the baker was "defiling the bread", among other things. That alone shows how much he loves... bread. His profession. And his bakery.
Awesome stuff.

Are you going to update?

I love this story, and I love your writing. The latter is truly amazing. The former is going on my "Favorites" list, because you deserve it.

So go to sleep proud of yourself, and love the art inside you.

Uh-oh. Suspense mounts!!

This story is very inspiring artistically.

My...I want some good bread now. Without diamonds, preferably.

Oh...he's helping to smuggle jewels!! In bread...how utterly thoughtful.

Oh...this doesn't sound good. On to the next chapter!

I love that the dough is his life. I totally cannot relate to it, and because of that, I love it. I liked it when you said that it's his lover, his family, etc., and I think that this may turn out to be a depressing story, but, again, the beauty of your writing prevails.

Again, beautiful.

It's so...placid. So tranquil. Your writing, I mean. Not the plot.

Wow.

You write in a dream. Or I read in a dream. One of those. Your writing is art, and each word is beautiful. The description is amazing perfection. I loved the part about the flour flying up in little tornadoes; it was really pretty and so unlike anything that I think of when I think of a bakery.

I am in love... Not being sarcastic either... the first chapter really reminded me of V.S Naipaul's "A house for Mr. Biswas", still trying to figure out why... Bravo

That was absolutely amazing.

Hi!
This was.....for lack of a more descriptive word....excellent - you must be a professional writer? If not you should consider entering this in a short story contest! Keep writing more!

this is very original! where did you see that photo that inspired you so much? I want some!