Wow. um, unusual end. So the little girl's family just left him to wander around? Okay.

I feel sorry for the poor clones.

Ah, I see. It was the woman's eyes that were bright with unshed tears. I see.

I knew the bagboy was in cahoots with these funny-haired guys. Oh, yes, and how can he breathe air if he has gills? Or does he still use his mouth? Would that work?

Hmm. he seems to be doing that a lot lately. I THOUGHT many years had passed.

Waitwaitwait. whose eyes were bright with unshed tears? The girl or the mother? And why do the quotation marks look so funny? And whose clothes look gaudy, his or everyone else's. I'm so confused.

Wow. I should review you more often, with all the reviews you gave me. Sorry for not finishing reviewing all these stories, but the internet in this stupid dorm shuts off at 11:30 PM, and by the time I got to this point and tried to read the next chapter, I couldn't. Anyway.

Love the questions in unison. Reminds me a little of George/Fred and Hermione/Harry/Ron that one night in the owl thingy-majig.

"Gnee" and "ack" sounds. You know, I would too.

And how much of a mummy is this guy? ON TO THE NEXT CHAPTER!

So. what year is this? And how is the evil bagboy involved in all this?

Classic whohasthezebra.

"Allen decided to let shock take over. He passed out."

Funny.

Oh, did you know when I was searching for your pen-name, you're the only one who has anything near "whohasthezebra"? I guess that's a good thing.

i love this story.. good job. HAH this is funny, we both put in our stories from 8th grade.... hah yes i finally put it up.

duude...just no...this is too weird ;) i would have to know you in order to dis it though and perhaps this is normal for you...i may never know...

This was weird! Interesting!
You have a strange sense of humor!

hehehe you made it longer....but you being the author you are must understand that in stories like these the police must NEVER interfere! otherwise our hero is put under arrest and then it takes an extra three chapters to get him out again!!! quoting you... "keep writing my friend...keep writing" :)
~megg

lol thas pretty whack dude but some things just need to be written!! continue it maybe actually make a story with a PLOT!!! :) keep the short chapters...they're nice :)

~Mirielle

Them chapters are really small. I hope they get longer

~Reno B