Make it better? How could it possibly be better?

I like how you ended it with:

Remember this warning-

Or suffer the pain.

Would you mind if I qouted you in my fantasy fic, By the Sword? I promise to give you credit.

That's really cool... it has a good rhythym to it . how do you spell that word?

Anyway, the title is neat too.. That's why I actually read it! But I liked the poem.

Thanks for all your helpful feedback on my work!

Well done as always, MJ. Another very nicely done poem, with a good message to boot. Of course, I wouldn't expect any less. ;) Wave of the future, peoples. Keep on writin!

Hola Senora MJ. Muy Bien. Hehe, I'm working on my espanol, or the few words that I know anyway. I like this, rhymes and all. Evil is always one of the classic poem topics and this is a good example. I am curious however to see how you would "tweek" to make it better. Nice Poem!

Arrivederci! or should I say: Adios, hehe.

-Terra Tigra-

wow, i like it! its rhythm, rhyme and subject matter all gave it a strangely religious feel, like a sermon or something...or a protective charm. on the whole, yay!

Once again I find this poem quite intresting and the cause of why so much is unknown. Excellent poem though, I must say. I agree with what your saying, I also tend to believe that evil changes from how each person takes it to be, because people can't see the same things all the time. If that makes sense. Keep up the talent

Greetings! I agree, evil never looks like what it is. Even if you know it's evil, you can almost always justify it. That's what makes it so tricky. "Socratic," huh? Good word. I'll have to remember that. I didn't think the rhyme scheme was THAT bad (grin). Better than mine usually are. You do have a typo in the first line, though (which multitudes of people will heckle you about until you fix it, no doubt.) (sigh) Anyhow. Good job!