i liked that it was good kinda confusing at first but i still liked it! : )

I'd say it's very good, overall; why don't you like it?

The only thing that really feels forced to me is how they got their names; just being twins born anywhere near Christmas would be enough to suggest Holly and Ivy.

Even though she claims she didn't mind, Ivy may have felt guilty over having been jealous of her sister being prettier and getting more attention... attention which resulted in her death.

This does capture very well the dangling, panicky feeling of repeatedly being told that something horrible didn't happen when you know damned well that it did. It is hard to tell what has driven the narrator insane... her grief, or the lies she keeps hearing.

Wow, that was really amazing! I loved it...the way you made it all...yeah. with the way she thought that, and it turned out to really be n' stuff. Oh, and...you write it on MicrosoftWord...then save it as a .txt file, and then it won't mess up the paragraphs. ^^; so if you save stories like that, it won't come as one big block o' stuff. mmyep. anyway, I loved this. :D 'twas good.

help! I know im reviewing my own story, but this is the first time ive done this, and can anyone tell me how to make this more readable? like not in one big old block? as you can see from the marks randomly inserted, I tried to do HTML, but it didnt work...::weep:: help!