Reviews for Sacrifice - FictionPress.com

Reviews For: Sacrifice

BWeep 2006-12-12 ch 1,	abuseYupz, sacrifice is the right word. Nice work, I really liked this.
Elle Blaisure 2006-08-16 ch 1,	abuseI really enjoyed reading this story. I agree with another reviewer, it was very bittersweet. I look forward to seeing more from you! Laurel B.
Shadow Gryphon 2006-05-09 ch 1,	abuseBittersweet and beautiful. It would have been a hard decision.
LC430 2005-11-24 ch 1,	abusethats good
Sara Ford 2003-11-08 ch 1,	abuseIt's wonderous, full of such emotions. I love it. It leaves a little to question though...
Aero-Rhapsody 2003-10-03 ch 1,	abuseThis is amazing. Such a wonderful story. Though some of it confuses me. Such as: "He had never left the tower, because it was their tower and no one had thought to remove him. No one had thought they could." Who is this "they", as in "Their"? "The wall’s have fallen." This sentence repeated brings much emphasis to the story, and a nice rhythymn. Master Jaiyaku. That sounds a bit, animeish. Are you aquainted with this genre? That is what I first thought of when I read your story, and she spoke his name. Though it would be cool if it really was feudal japan... nobody seems to like it.. I wish a few somebodys would just write some stories on it, stories that make you feel something for the plot. Anywhoo... The end is so sweet! Too much fluff for me, although there isnt all that much. It ends well, sums up most of the points, but it does leave one searching for a sequel or something. But I know it would ruin the mood of this story. So, what I think you should do...
Jake Delfeir 2003-09-29 ch 1,	abuse... whoa. I'm really impressed. Very in-depth and psychological for such a small work. The detail and information you provide is very good. You completely blow my stories out of the water. Keep up the good work.
Gloom 2003-08-18 ch 1,	abuseWow that's really excellent! I really like your discription. I'm no good at dialog, so good job :D It was really cool \|adds you to fave authors list\| If you got time, R & R Unexpected, a story of mine ^-^ Thanks
Celeste Se'oir 2003-08-14 ch 1,	abuse'sniff' your a good writer it flowed like a well writen poem making you not want to turn away keep at it
Sivart 2003-08-08 ch 1,	abuseall I can say is excellent keep up the good work Sivart
Floating Dreamer 2003-07-20 ch 1,	abuseThis was definately an interesting tale and I became curious about the two main characters and their relationship with one another. I think the story's opening was the weakest element. A few typos and unclear sentences made it hard to understand the atmosphere and setting of the tale which makes ii difficult to get into it. Also, the characters' dynamics felt a little off at first, but once they got settled into their dialogue and interaction things started to become clearer. Overall it was a fun read, it just needs to pull focus to make things clearer for the reader. Keep up the good work.
HarmonyIsarine 2003-06-14 ch 1,	abusethis is really really good! It's well written and has a tremendous story to it, even though it's a stand-alone short story! This is awesome. ^_^
Contia Mirian 2003-04-03 ch 1,	abuseMost different... slightly confusing but good none the less. Ice
Salios 2002-11-06 ch 1,	abuseshe's right you do need to do more on this story no matter what. it's kick @$$ already like all of your other works
chibi j 2002-09-04 ch 1, anon.	abuseokay, you may say this is a one and only one-part, but it really deserves to be so much more! for such a small piece, it holds so much mystery of what happened, what will happen, why, who, where, and any other w's you can think of. please, consider expansion on this story. it was excellent.

Return to Top