Wow! it gets better and better!

Hallowweeen! Yea. Annoying doorbell. ::Kills it::

I'm hungry. Anyways, good so far. So much stuff not there yet, it just keeps ya guessing yanno ^_~

OooooooOoooooo.

This is Good! The suspense! The thrill!

Excusez moi...~_~

LoL? XDDDD.

Wat does stereotypical mean? What does alcove mean? XD

I like the plot, but your characters seem stereotypical. f you gave them a little more depth and described the scenes just a bit more this would be a lot better. But other than that I really like this. ^_^

amazing story! continue

I liked the story all up to the REALLY long paragraph. This story is going somewhere, no doubt. But it needs major touch up. Indent after someone says something and give more detail, Please. ^-^ Hope more come's out.