"little warrior" I'll bet she 'hates' that name.

Sounds like Vix has a bit of a crush on Tarm.

'Bathtime', huh? And you'll help? Gee, somehow this sounds a bit familiar. (Like a couple of someones we know and love?)

Evelyn has been hurt before, and badly. It shows.
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You wrote this without even trying? WOW!! Now I can't wait for that e-mail!!! Like I said, talent! I've started a notebook for this. All your own. Love ya, hon!! Niere

Hi Roz!! I LIKE this!! Will you be continuing it? I hope so. If you do, I'll have to start a whole new notebook for it.

Such talent! A whole world created, complete with currency. Cool!! Watching for more. Niere

Looks good sorry I've been away from fanfiction for a long while, trying to be part of this writing group that I'm thinking about quiting.
{Plus I lost my aol.. Why if you tried to email me at DesiringShadows@aol.com doesn't work.. I'm on either signoftheelves@hotmail.com or ilythiiri_mlaen@yahoo.com.}

Delightful beginning, you have three different ways to balance out your characters.