FictionPress.com - let the words flow
| FictionPress.com - let the words flow |
|
| Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search | Login Register Extras |
| Individual-9086 2002-09-08 ch 1,  | abuseCute story... You have great ideas and I love your setting. My only complaint is the abrupt scene changes. I thought that when you flashed to the science teacher, it was really great, but it didn't really fit with your story. But on the whole, good job. Keep writing. |