"A sea of heads motion back from the sudden force, desperate to arrive at their destination, Quentin falls into the seat." - This is a problematic sentence. It should be two.

I like how you show all the different people's thoughts, making them seem more real than just background characters.

I like their slightly flirtatious bantering. And though I know it would ruin it for there to be a continuation, I realy wish that there was one.

-Jesse
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Wow...interesting idea, actually one I've considered before, and nicely executed. I also loved the last paragraph - the line "remembering to breathe" especially; it reminds me of a Placebo track, The Crawl. Anyhow, nice writing!

Very nicely written. I very much like the way you write. Your style is excellent, and your skill superb. I don't know what else to say. You're one of the very best authors whose works i've read. Very, very good.

I'll make sure to read the authors on your faves. If they're anywhere near as good as you are, I think i'l want to read their stuff.

I wanna wanna WANNA learn to write like you. =) I think i'll read your stuff over and over again too. =)=)=)

Keep writing!

~Luke

I liked this story. I was surprised to fing the woman read Robert Graves. Not that I object, I love all of his works. It just seems a bit difficult read for a bus trip.

The other passengers in the bus, each with their owm burden and background was a surprisingly tender touch, although a hint bitter around the edges. But again, so it's life.

A lovely story. It's filled with loneliness, with the faintest glitter of hope at the end.

Mischevious. I'd be beating my head against the
windows of the bus if I were that poor fellow.

Thanks for the review, and I'm sorry it took me so long to return the favour. This an interesting story supported strongly by the fact that you wrote it well. The character dialogue is good and the main charater's observations are well thought out. Well done :)

that was great. i love how the author was omniscient and able to peek into everyones head with out losing touch with the main character. i love the tone of your writing. its kind of... i apathetic or bored... sarcastic... i don't know. i love it.

Intriguing- interesting little piece.
Gives an atmosphere, some images.
Cute little conversation/encounter, leaving you smiling, but wondering for more.
Very social piece, how random people interact-- loved the "Did anyone notices? Is there anyone to offer sympathy at the woman's remark?" Very cute:)
Very different and interesting piece.

I hope you'll be writing more to this one. It's very good - you have a wonderful style of writing!

Very nice.... I enjoy your writing style.... do you plan on finishing this one?

Odd. I like how you gave a little info on everyone's life on the bus, where they were going, where they WISH they were. Interesting insights. Wil there be more chapters, perhaps? I would read them readily....

I think he's going to see her again. At least I hope so. I tend to imagine connections with people I've never talked to, like complete strangers that I make eye contact with or something, so I know how it feels when you know that you might never see someone again. Even a complete stranger.

Another wonderful piece of writing! ^_^ So was this just a one-shot, or are you planning on adding more? I like it.

-- Ivy

Hey, I finally got here! *G* Before I start dumping praise on ya I just have one query. Are you intending to mix present and past tense in this, as you do here: "He curses softly at what was lacking..."? If so then cool. If not then yeah, I thought you might wanna know that it's there. Is this going to be another several-or-more-chapters one, or just a one-off? Either way I like Quentin and this rather intense little exchange he had with the mysterious woman. :) God I hate it when public transport is that damn crowded. Makes me shiver in a bad way *lol*

Very nicely done - a simple scenario given life and character by some insightful, and quite stylized writing. There was a terrific sense of something about to happen, and the way it was suddenly cut off...well, it works on some level, like a five minute film.

Very enjoyable piece of work!