Wow!
Will they drive the ghost from their memory? Will the Dreamer wake soon? Do they love Cle, or Jordan or Sly or Natalie? So many questions...

I don't know how many times I've read this piece--three or four, at least--but I keep forgetting to review.

Anyway, I really love this story, and I like it how it is--a standalone oneshot. It just seems to fit that way. Characters, feelings, descriptions--I love it all.

Thanks for writing,

Ashe

This is beautifully poetic.

This story is incredible, very strange, very fascinating. It's full of mystery, and you really create an atmosphere of coldness, all pale monochrome colours. Very eery, but very good.

Wow, I really like how this is written, are you going to continue it? please?

i want more, but update middleversedeux first, pretty please ^.^

This story sounds very interesting. But I still don't know who the narrator was.

wow! creepy, very cool. is this a short story, or is there any chance that even over a year later there might be more written sometime? ^^;

sounds very interesting. it reminds me of one of the sandman stories (neil gaiman), perhaps from 'fables and reflections.' i love the way this is written. it's very poetic. i liked 'ghost-blue' and searing away the nightmares and dancing like white lightning and natalie's wish to die and will to live...among everything else.

typos?
'and if you [eat] them you’ll glow too'
'And her hands a[n]d her lips were cold'

anyway, i thought this was lovely and very dreamlike. perhaps because it was written early in the morning, or maybe you're just that good. more of the second, i think.

yes, yess very interesting, please continue. it's so surreal, i'm kinda' glad this chapter wasn't long, if it had been i think they'd be dragging me to the looney bin right about now, my head's spinning as it is!:)

*sit and stares* Wow.... That was... *can't think of an adequate word* That was amazing. I can't believe more people haven't reviewed this! I really enjoyed this, and if there's another chapter, I'll be waiting patiently to read it.

~Cinaed

Hmm...I almost think this is better as a stand-alone short piece. It's got that kind of feel to it. And it'll keep people guessing. But I loved it. You are definately one of my favorite authors. Now read some of my stuff--! ^___^

Beautifully written! You took a confusing idea and put it clearly into words (something I could never do!) and still managed to keep all the pretty wording! Nice job; I don't know many writers who can do that!

Wow, that was very intriguing, and poetic - a beautiful use of language. Definetely interesting, though I have very little idea what is happening O.o

Well, as long as you know what's happening, I'm sure everything will work out. Definetely something you should continue though.

Whoa, that was deep.

Your descriptions were so powerful and vivid. I may have not quite understood the meaning of this story, but that fault is mine, not the fic's. It had a really interesting concept--the summary was what really drew my attention.

Awesome work; keep it up.