"I'm sorry. I've failed you all. The melody has struck a wrong chord. The orchestra has stopped. The symphony must end. Please forgive me. Let them not weep. Let them know that I'm glad to go. We'll meet again."
too formal
i dont feel like reviewing this. its a good concept. maybe make it longer and describe the character before she dies.

Oooh, creepy and sad and I love it! The writing's solid, just a few naggy details I saw:

"Without you even knowing, you reach up to brush it away."

would sound better, I think, as:

"Without even realizing, you reach up to brush it away."

or

"Without even realizing, your hand reaches up to brush it away."

-or- just change "Without even realizing, . . ." to "Involuntarily . . ."

Hehe, ok, way too many or's, but just wanted ta give you some options :)

"But the shine has left her eyes leaving only empty spaces."

could sound better as:

"But the shine has left her eyes leaving only blankness."

Hehe, me and my dumb nitpicking, I usually don't do this in reviews, but your story is so close to perfect that I just had to point out the little things, in most other stories there are too many to list :)

Oh, and as for writing it in Elena's POV: Please don't! The mystery surrounding her reasoning for killing herself is one of the nicer points in your story, and . . . I dunno, I think it makes it sadder. Like if you told the reason, some ppl might be like 'that's a dumb reason to kill urself' and the story'll lose some of its saddness. I think writing in Elena's POV would work if you don't reveal too much, maybe have it from Elena's ghost's POV right after she's hung herself, that would be more interesting than the 'your' and less revealing than just Elena.

*whacks himself on the head with a brick to keep from blabbering on*

Wow, that was really good! This is going to sound crazy, but I like reading Humor and Angst, those are my favorite genres. Anyways, I really liked this. You chose the right words and it sounded good. You made me feel like I was actually there, and that's really good! Have you ever thought of publishing these types of things? Like, a bunch of poems and short stories in one book? I would buy the book!! In short, this was really good and I liked it, and I hope you write more. Wow, this is long....

~*~Marcy AKA Matt Lover~*~ (From Digimon....)
I love you Nick!!!!
Winds kick brass!!
GO PANTHER REGIMENT!!!!!

...Wow. That's an image that's going to haunt me for a long time.

Hey everyone! I just wanted to say that uh... I don't remember. Oh yeah! I'm in the process of writing this from Elena's POV instead of 'yours' so this way you'll know who she is and why she did it. Elena is my favorite out of all my characters, so expect to see more stuff with her in it.

thats was excellelent annalise, keep the work comming :)

sorry i didn't sign in again :(.. i'm lazy...anyways... I'm pretty sure i've read one of ur original drafts of this..but i think i like this one better.. i don't know what else to say. I don't think there's anyway to improve it. I think this is the good copy..it doesn't need another draft. well again sorry it took so long to review! can't wait for u to write some more. ciao mia amica~ katie

i'm not really into this kind of story. i like the kind with characters etc. this reminds me of when my english teacher makes me read a short story and i say "why the hell did i have to read that?". but, on a plus side, it was well written, just not, to me, interesting.

Aw this made me want to cry.....But it was really good!!!!

ooh. i like it. very prettily written. thats the only word i can think of for it-pretty. its good. really good. write more.