this is a really goo story, i lie how you put it from the vampires point of view but like making him compasionate to humans, in most stories the vampires look down on the humans. so making him like the humans and having hman friends is really cool. i hope to see more of the story soon! keep up the good work :)

Great story! You developed the paragraphs well and I really think you should continue it - maybe make your vampire face death or maybe make it find other vampires, I dunno. I don't usually review but, to an author, now I know, that it matters more than everything so check out my story 'kay? It's in Horror too, it's called "Who Wants to Live Forever?" and don't forget to tell me what you think! It'll only take a minute! Kisses!

Very good story. You need to fix it into paragraph format, but it's quite well-written. I hope you have a follow-up or second chapter planned; I think the story deserves it. :-)