'If I could have flied away that night.'

Um, 'flied'? Should be 'flown'.

Beautifully written and another sad theme.

i read it whats wrong ravyn?

That is a good poem. I love how you use your word choice.

amazing! My councillor tells me the same thing...write it down. i do but i dont post anything
hopefully i will get where you are... have the courage to make my suffering public.
Amazing story. Keep posting!

Wow. That really touched me. I had an experience like one that u write about in your poem. I like it when you said

"Would you tell someone, you would wouldn't you?

That's how I know it never happened to you."

Its so true. I'm not going to say what happened to me. It happened about 3 years ago and it still haunts me. I didn't tell anyone until about 3 months after the incident. Anyways. I loved it. You so pationit in your writting.

*~*Jocelyn*~*

I read this before FF.net split up, and i only just registed on here, so, ya'know.

Before this peom was all i knew about your past, now i understand you better, i understand the poem better.

Your strong, i admire you =)

this is excellent. it's a very emotional poem. oh yeah, what's Vampirist, it sounds interesting. If ya feel like telling me my (new and spiffy) email is obsdianbutterfly88@yahoo.com. LOVED THE POEM

wowwwww sometimes the stupid consller at my shcool say junk like 'it will be fine' yea right!
but this is how i feel so thanx for writing it

What happened? Did ur father abuse u? Grrrr, I know how that feels, my dad always hit my mom, he hit me once. U know it's strange, the whole deal w/ my dad happened 3 year ago and i wrote a poem about a bird too, dont remember it though, my teacher kept it.

...interesting

...interesting

I like it! And about ur bio, I'll b your friend! I'm slightly mental at times, and can only come up with ideas if... a) I have a strange dream. b)I find something really good that's already written and my mind goes between the lines. c) I get a suggestion that will be next to impossible to work with. I can also take lots of physical pain without a sound (though mental pain *teasing* is another story)

THAT WAS SO SWEET!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This happends to a lot of people. It's no big deal. It happends every day. People don't tell what happend. I never did. No one knows but whoever reads this and whoever reads this won't matter 'cause my last name is a mystery :)
Anyways, thanks for the review! I REALLY appreshiate it :)