|Reviews for Arisatayuu|
| blue raindrop 8/28/03 . chapter 13
this was a very sad chapter. very sad indeed. and btw, i dont like wei. he kinda got on my nerves. wow. you got me angry over one of your chars. nice job. btw, i didnt like the president either. yup, the k-guy.
| blue raindrop 8/28/03 . chapter 12
i must say that I love this new teacher youre making. shes so cute and so funny! shes my second fav character now. hehehhehehehehe
oo gosh. and the cliffhanger. the story has just taken a very very very serious turn (a good turn _)
| blue raindrop 8/28/03 . chapter 11
:: gasp:: ko graduated in this one. i was very sad to read him leave. very very sad. cuz hes my fav character. -_-
| blue raindrop 8/28/03 . chapter 10
lol, this was a pretty funny chapter at the beginning with sowa and emi. glad to see sowa becoming friends (very sluggishy) with emi.
shinto and emi.. i swear, i never expected it.i was anticipating a different pairing...but ok.
| blue raindrop 8/28/03 . chapter 9
no I love Ko! you cant love ko, aki! hes mine! mine i tell ya!
great chap. i like the cutting your hair thing btw. oh and thats a surprise with dua. i actually thought she would take it. hmm.. ur just full of surprises _
| blue raindrop 8/28/03 . chapter 8
whoops. lol my review for ch7 was supposed to be my review for ch8. confused? ah, well. was this chapter good? were there any chapters that WEREN'T?
| blue raindrop 8/28/03 . chapter 7
tsk tsk tsk.. who is the mysterious guy who has loved emi ever since? hmm. hmm... it hurts my head to think. in my mind at this moment, there were TWO people that seemed to be potentials. but having read chapter 15... anyway, we'll just see wont we?
oh, and nice one with soma_ although it was kinda mean. im beginning to kinda feel sorry for her now.
| blue raindrop 8/28/03 . chapter 6
ah finally, their long- awaited confession! man, yu is like the bestest friend anyone could ever have. seriously. i wonder what i woulda done if i was her..
| blue raindrop 8/28/03 . chapter 5
ah, yes the announcing of dance; it was a convenient time for emi and yosoro and their short-lived relationship. and the president's name was so extremely long! wow, does anyone with such a long name exist nowadays? gosh.
| blue raindrop 8/28/03 . chapter 4
okay- is it too obvious that i've already read the story until like ch15 and im just going bak to review each chapter ; i just like to do it cuz it makes authors happy _ theres something big i have to say for chapter 15... and i think i was the only silly reader to have imagined it..
well, anyway- the chapter titles are helping me remember what happened in each chapter!
ah, this is the scary chapter- the one where i thought that yu was the one trying to commit suicide.. geez, u scared me for a moment there!
| blue raindrop 8/28/03 . chapter 3
emi is very very very VERY DENSE! it remeinds me of sakura.. _
sowa's a great bully btw!
nice chap. onto next 1...
| blue raindrop 8/28/03 . chapter 2
o i have a fav character already!
| Geminisama 8/10/03 . chapter 22
Good, good. I like. There are a few bones I'd like to pick with you though, na. (; Okay, here goes. Be ready for much apologising at the end. Gem can't give anyone constructive criticism put gently, without saying sorry 1 million times.)
When Yosoro woke up, he would be most likely to let his parents know, instead of Yu. Family always comes first for a long time, unless they're abusive bastards who beat you every other Wednesday.
Use the word 'said' more frequently. I know of publishers who will put a book at the bottom of their list when the word said isn't used. An author should realise that the mere 'said' is enough to suffice. You did use it more often than some authors I know, and you did use 'asked' instead of inquired, or questioned, which was good. It's okay to use actions too, and add adjectives after 'said'. Best to keep it plain. Strangely enough, it can be distracting.
Yu was a little too calm. Most people would be pacing the halls, biting their nails, or pretending to read a book. (Often upside down..)
Now... You didn't point out the obvious though. Like 'shouted angrily'... That's good. That's very good.
I don't think the parents would leave for coffee though, either. They're likely to wait by the bedside of the child until the bitter end (and sometimes afterwards.)
; If you want to ask me 'Who made you the expert on human behaviour?'
It's because I'm a reject, and tend to over analyze things too much, instead of hanging out with friends. ; I have a lot of time to watch people. Sadly.
Good though. I hope my *Points up* Comments will help you, na. I hope you don't mind, eh. I just want to help.
*Gives thumbs up* Hope you have fun in California!
| etherealangel 8/10/03 . chapter 22
omg! that title scared me 4 a bit until i say the bold words "It is not the last chapter" omg! hitori's mom invented the arisatayuu products? that creep! getting inside information! *stabs hitori* *stab* *stab* *grimaces at blood-stained clothes..going to need some clorox bleach here...* yay! Shinto saved the day! *glomps shinto* he made hitori go on his knees! how cool is that! *goes starry-eyed*
one of my fav parts:
"quickly shoved him back onto the ground by pushing him down with his foot"
so shinto's got a violent streak! P
GR! Ko stole a kiss! if i didn't feel so bad 4 him, i wuda given him an uppercut!
another fav part:
"“Trust men, trust men!”
hahahaa..seems like shinto is trying to say "trust me! trust me!" u onli hafta take the n offa men. and goshdammit! shinto and emi didn't kiss!
evil ko! thinking abt locking amarante in! /
and yosoro is finally awake! he's got like a wat? 500 hour sleep!
| Lavender Megumi 8/10/03 . chapter 22
Like it! Though like a lot of stories it has a almost gift boxed ending (meaning it all work out perfect)but none the less good. I like Amarante...Another chapter please!