"The opalescence lays cool on my skin,
turns my blood to silk"

[bows in awe of your figurative language skills]

Awesome imagery, beautiful words. I especially liked the fireflies. Pretty, pretty stuff. Get rid of the chocolate line, I got distracted...no, just kidding.

I like this. The whole piece seems to set a mood, it all seems to link in with your line 'elusive and wandering...' I love the long words you used, and the way you decribed it all... esp the drumbeat the the earth.
The only thing I find strange is the line 'poignant as tears'. To me it seems a bit odd, a bit cliche maybe? The rest is beautiful though.

I liked that. Recently I have written a poem about nature and one about a fairy and I related to this well. Great job. ^_^

Oooh! This is cool! So much better than anything I could write! Wonderful job!