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| Shining Moonlight 2003-07-31 ch 3,  | abuseNoo! Suicide is not the way! (This is a powerful poem with excellent rhythm) Please don't say good-bye! (Although the poem really was quite good) Shining Moonlight shiningmoonlight12@yahoo.com |
| Shining Moonlight 2003-07-31 ch 2, | abuseOh! I love the flowing of the first four verses and the rhyming of the last one: it just summed this poem up so well! I'm going to go read the other poems, but I'd like for you to email me sometime. Shining Moonlight shiningmoonlight12@yahoo.com |
| Jau-Peacecraft 2003-06-19 ch 12, | abuse"What have I become? Lying here, in hell, In a pool of hope; Crimson, dead and fell." I thought those lines were very good, I never read of someone in a pool of hope and drowning (possibly, thats what i derived from the poem). Very good, corrosion is my favorite yet. This would make an excellent song a la A.F.I. style. ~ Jau Peacecraft |
| Jau-Peacecraft 2003-06-19 ch 7, | abuseI wonder if this comes from self experience, as I am a recovering insomaniac and a coffee lover and I think this description is picture perfect. Jau Peacecraft |
| Jau-Peacecraft 2003-06-19 ch 2, | abuseI really like from what I picked up was a sense of confusion in the begining and a sense of acceptance at the end. I will read the rest of the collection, keep writing, and thank you for commenting on my poem. ~Jau Peacecraft |
| Lothe 2003-01-21 ch 1, | abuseHmm *nod nod* Well...the themes are fairly standard angst stuff, but I guess there isn't that much to explore in that vein *grin* So what you have to focus on here is the diction and imagery, and yours are both striking. The vocabulary well exceeds what a fourteen-year-old should possess, and occasionally you hit upon exactly the right words and images to describe the emotion. It all makes for some rather engaging poetry ;) I look forward to seein some of your other work. ~Lothe |
| Tainted Muse 2003-01-14 ch 11, | abuseHey! Great job, as one of the many Goddesses of Angst I applaud you. *smiles* I adore your vocabulary and how emotional your passages are. Anyway, please enjoy some of my other works (hints lightly) and I look forward to reading more of your works too. |
| Lost in a Vision 2003-01-12 ch 4, | abuseHeh... very cool stuff here. I especially like Follow the Devil. Great imagery. Write more. |
| Kenske 2003-01-09 ch 9, | abuse....great poems! My favorite has to be Insomnia! There's just something about it that draws me in. In some of your poems, the rhythm gets a little bumpy, but it's allways hard to find the right word. Keep on writing, and never stop! ^^ |
| midnight dreams 2002-12-25 ch 3, | abuseYou have a knack for writing dark poems. Note: Beautiful dark poems ::wink:: |
| midnight dreams 2002-12-25 ch 2, | abuseWoah...this poem is so powerful! ::applauds:: Wonderful job. :) Merry Christmas. :) Pwease wead my works...pwease? Thank you! :) |
| Toireasa 2002-12-22 ch 3, | abuseI like this one better than the last one; it's more flowy, and dagnabbit, I love flowy. No mistakes that I noticed. Very good job. Thanks for reviewing my poems! ~Toireasa |
| Toireasa 2002-12-22 ch 2, | abuseHmmm, sounds more like you'd forget, but never forgive. Anywho, onto the review. I like this, there are some parts that fall out of the funk, but nothing too big. I love the way you do your repetition. Very nice. Nothing else to say... next poem. ~Toireasa |
| Silvery Glitter 2002-12-21 ch 4, | abusestill love your poems! |
| Silvery Glitter 2002-12-21 ch 3, | abuseoh my god! that was...amazing! *speechless* o_O ...what can i say? violet |