This is superb! You know that...right?

I love it. It's beautiful.

Only one thing, you might want to change the "thy" to "the". It seems a little awkward. Not a criticism, merely a suggestion.

Love the poem, it really is beautiful.

PS - You're on my favorite authors list

Such imagery and flow! Simply wonderful.

Beautiful. Truely peaceful...


~Heart of the Sword

Beautifully written. The imagery is serene, soothing, it reminds me of my grandmother's house in New York. Nice.

Oh! Cool! that is such a neat poem! It has great meaning, in a nice and calm, serene way. I love it! Keep up the good work ol' buddy ol' friend!

It's great! Even though you change your rhythm constantly, you retained the flow. Keeping the flow in this style of poetry can be difficult sometimes. A beautiful poem.

Obviously, I'm now a member of Fanfiction, so yes, I read your e-mail and responded, Gaby.

--Maddy--

just one word: beautiful

i found the 'thy' rather misplaced since it seems to be the only one there. but it's a flurry of picture, this poem of yours and a blur of changing views as well as sound, if you can believe such a claim. i can hear it, with wind nibbling at my ears. =P incredible.