i'm sorry...

oh. i'm so sorry. that must've been really hard. :( i've never lost a parent, but i know how it feels like to lose someone you've looked up to so very much, that it felt like part of you died with that person. i almost envy you your relationship with your father - he must have been someone truly great to make you write each line so touchingly sad. for my part, i've never been that close with my father (since i only get to see him during summer - what the heck, i'm babbling), but reading this sort of inspires me to try to get closer to him when next i see him. (so thank you for that.) hmmm... we'll see...-_^

anyway, i liked this very much. plus, the song is a favorite of mine! hope ya don't mind, but i think i'll type the chorus down (or what i remember of it, at least) - sort of like an added tribute:

"the leader of the band is tired
his eyes are growing old
his blood runs through my instruments
and his song is in my soul
my life has been a poor attempt
to imitate the man
i'm just a living legacy
to the leader of the band."

whoo! there. :) keep writing!

wow...what a sad poem! i really like it! it must have been hard for you. i've never lost anyone so close before, only my uncle, and i miss him. i can't imagine what it would be like to lose a parent so early. well, good job! keep writing!

About your dad, I'm sorry. The poem is wonderful and I can imagine how your dad must've been. It shows how important he was to you. But I also know that even if you aren't able be fine and perfect, just the fact that you strive to achieve something would make your dad very proud.

I really liked this
My pop is the one person I don't think I could live without. (aside from that I'd be driven crazy by my mom and sibling) So I really appreciated how you wrote this. Everyone has their own star. and My pop is mine. So Thanks, for reminding me, yet again, how much I value my pop.
~Sora

Reading pieces usually does not bring me close to tears but this one was an exception. It was so powerful. I feel that anything I say about this will be inadequate to the way it makes me feel. I wish I could write like this.

Jade

Beautiful... I know you miss your father but you memories of him will keep him alive (but it doesn't feel te same, does it?)

It's scary to have to experience your father's death... you know, for me it's scary to o because i think if he died, i wouldn't miss him at all....

Talk about coincidence! I was listening to a CD by a band that I happen to like but don't know very well earlier today, and they were doing a rendition of that song!!! Creepy, ne? I love it ^^ The poem, I mean, and the song.
How did your dad die? You don't have to answer if you don't want to. ^^ This is really touching; I like it a lot.
Thanks for finishing "Child of Metal" - but I have to confess that I probably won't be working on it any more; it will probably end up being rewritten a while from now. I'm sorry!

this was good....... well written and everything. i loved it. keep up the good work.* brought a tear to my eye*

:D

Sad! Sorry about your dad.You presented this very well. Nicely done. Thanks for your review on what am I. Another hint it has to do with measuring think of water and keep writing.

I like. While I could never empathize with losing a family member, I can understand what it's like to at least *miss* your father. I don't live with mine, so he might as well be dead to me. Yet still, I know he's at least living, which is a comfort. Anyways, I digress. I particularly like the ending, and the lyrics inbetween each stanza was nice. Thanks for the reviws and beautiful poem.
~Toireasa

Very sad, but memerable. Well, you said to review. So, I did.

aw, that's so sad, i love it though, great job

Beautiful poem. Your lines are very good, very lyrical, especially at the end, but most importantly, very emotional.

Losing someone you love is heart-breaking. My grandmother who took care of me when I was a young kid died in '97. Sadly, I never got the chance to get to know her. Remember, your dad will still live on.. in you.

Smile..!