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daybreak
Author: godawful teen-angst poetry  PM
A modified tanka-see ch 5 of comments or the a/n for explanation-involves flowers, dye, tears, and mascara. And, of course, daybreak-hence the title...yes, I'm quite aware of my condition...
Rated: Fiction K - English - Words: 138 - Reviews: 3 - Published: 06-27-03 - id: 1341869
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daybreak
Morning flow'r rises
Reaches out to touch the sky;
Pigment drips, and
Ink streaks down as tears of mine
Like wet mascara trails.
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for those of you who didn't read my last Comment (#5), a modified tanka is 5-7-5-7-6. See—look. I didn't just make it up to get away with cheating…I swear…but really, I like the extra beat at the end. Sort of like a choka's 7-7 ending, but with the brevity of a tanka and the little bit of distinction. So. There you have it. If anyone else wants to take a crack at it, I'd be immensely pleased…but no pressure…
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