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Author:
asyousaid
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This is pretty good: my mind's eye takes over from my actual eyes in the final stanza.
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- English - Angst/Tragedy - Words: 66 - Published: 11-06-04 - id: 1754546
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Passing by
Kids let off fireworks
I saw a man
Shoot his mouth off
Horribly literally
This place
Gets to you after a while
Passing by
Kids smoke heroin
I saw police
Drive away from here
Terribly quickly
This place
Kills you after a while
Passing by
Kids die quietly
I saw the fear
Written in their eyes
Awfully clearly
This place
Finishes after a while
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